Bereavement

RSherman

(576 posts) Mon Apr 24, 2023, 04:35 PM Apr 2023

Nightly visits from Rebecca Alynn

My sister passed away 10 years ago at age 46. She has been visiting my dreams, so I wrote a poem for her:

A VISIT FROM BECKY

My sister passed
from this world,
gone,
like a puff of smoke.

Extinguished,
a cinder girl
reduced to ash.

Her last life’s breath,
exhaled and rose,
a mystic mist,
to form a cloud.

At night,
wispy tendrils
swirl and descend.
She seeps,
full bodied,
into my dreams.

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Nightly visits from Rebecca Alynn (Original Post) RSherman Apr 2023 OP

Oh wow. Maraya1969 Apr 2023 #1

BEAUTIFUL!!! Karadeniz Apr 2023 #2

K&R 2naSalit Apr 2023 #3

Beautiful. Sending hugs. n/t livetohike Apr 2023 #4

This is a beautiful description of the the loss of another delisen Apr 2023 #5

Perfect comment! RSherman Apr 2023 #6

What a lovely eulogy for your beloved sister, my dear RSherman . . . CaliforniaPeggy Apr 2023 #7

I love this poem. Dark n Stormy Knight Sep 2023 #8

Maraya1969

(23,564 posts)

1. Oh wow.

Reply to RSherman (Original post)

Mon Apr 24, 2023, 04:52 PM

Apr 2023

Karadeniz

(24,763 posts)

2. BEAUTIFUL!!!

Reply to RSherman (Original post)

Mon Apr 24, 2023, 04:53 PM

Apr 2023

2naSalit

(103,806 posts)

3. K&R

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Mon Apr 24, 2023, 05:27 PM

Apr 2023

livetohike

(24,419 posts)

4. Beautiful. Sending hugs. n/t

Reply to RSherman (Original post)

Mon Apr 24, 2023, 06:01 PM

Apr 2023

delisen

(7,422 posts)

5. This is a beautiful description of the the loss of another

Reply to RSherman (Original post)

Mon Apr 24, 2023, 06:47 PM

Apr 2023

They are gone, yet they are here.

RSherman

(576 posts)

6. Perfect comment!

Reply to delisen (Reply #5)

Mon Apr 24, 2023, 06:52 PM

Apr 2023

Thank you so much for "getting it". I could not have said it better. Did you notice all of the lines are in the past tense until the end?

CaliforniaPeggy

(156,969 posts)

7. What a lovely eulogy for your beloved sister, my dear RSherman . . .

Reply to RSherman (Original post)

Mon Apr 24, 2023, 10:35 PM

Apr 2023

It's a wonderful poem.

I hope that it brings you relief from your sorrow.

Dark n Stormy Knight

(10,486 posts)

8. I love this poem.

Reply to RSherman (Original post)

Sat Sep 2, 2023, 06:42 AM

Sep 2023

Sorry for your loss, even though so long ago.

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